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[Hawk819]

Here's a Haiku to all my friends in House Kurita.

Yellow Bird rises.
The Dragon falters
The Yellow Bird is victorious!

[Armored Yokai]

Dragon breaks the blade
while the sun is blocked by shade

[kazlaton]

Hawk819, on 30 March 2014 - 07:54 PM, said:

Here's a Haiku to all my friends in House Kurita.

Yellow Bird rises.
The Dragon falters
The Yellow Bird is victorious!

A haiku is 5/7/5. Your attempt is 5/5/9. Your failure has been noted.

[Steinar Bergstol]

Well, Hawk. That's that I guess. You will now be expected to committ seppuku for such a shameful haiku failure. After all, having begun embracing the culture of the Draconis Combine by attempting to compose a haiku (very commendable, by the way. More citizens of the Federated Suns should realize the inevitable and prepare themselves for the day when the Dragon's protective gaze covers the entire Inner Sphere) one assumes you wish to fully immerse yourself by accepting the consequences of such drastic and life altering failure.

Edited by Steinar Bergstol, 28 April 2014 - 04:59 AM.

[kazlaton]

My apologies to Hawk819 and Steiner Bergstol. I should have phrased my reply as a proper haiku.

Standard haiku is
five seven five syllables
try again, my foe

And as for a proper retort to your challenge,

Dragons on the march
The DCMS will break
the davion sword

We, the Black-Foxes,
The Third Takata Lancers
March to victory

I look forward to your reply.

[FearTheAmish]

The Sly Snake Slithers
The Bright Sword is Drawn Today
Who will take the Blade

Head Hunters step forth
Arming themselves with the sword
Sheath it in the snake

Because my fellow Davion cannot Haiku...

[kazlaton]

Excellent!

A sword is mundane.
Base metal in common form.
Its destiny, rust.

Dragons are mythic,
divine forces of nature.
Which would you follow?

[FearTheAmish]

kazlaton, on 02 May 2014 - 12:22 AM, said:

Excellent!

A sword is mundane.
Base metal in common form.
Its destiny, rust.

Dragons are mythic,
divine forces of nature.
Which would you follow?

Wielded by Arthur
Forged from the heart of a star
Given by the Lady

Its story is legend
Snakes have fallen to it before
The future is Bright

Weilded in the past
By kings and knights true and pure
Taken up again

Injustice will Fall
To the Bright blade of Freedom
A light of the Pure

Choice is yours and mine
Injustice and Bigotry
Or Freedom and Hope

Edited by FearTheAmish, 04 May 2014 - 01:38 PM.

[CyclonerM]

I thought i read that often an haiku includes a reference to a season, quiaff? Anyway, even if i strongly disagree with some aspects of Bushido (Seppuku..), i think i have an understanding of your concepts of duty and honor, values shared by the Clans of Kerensky. I would like to try to write a haiku, but, well.. I have never studied syllabes in English Shame on me.

[101011]

Aff, my 9th grade English class taught me that haikus often revolve around a simple part of everyday life that is taken for granted. For example, dragons.

[Vanguard319]

Hawk819, on 30 March 2014 - 07:54 PM, said:

Here's a Haiku to all my friends in House Kurita.

Yellow Bird rises.
The Dragon bows to his foe
Yellow Bird winning

Fixed it for you, it's in proper order for a haiku now

Edited by Vanguard319, 04 May 2014 - 01:59 PM.

[FearTheAmish]

Only in MWO... talking trash via poetry

[Strum Wealh]

The Fox perks his ears
Epic Davion haiku
Make the Dragon bow

[kazlaton]

FearTheAmish, on 04 May 2014 - 01:01 PM, said:

Wielded by Arthur
Forged from the heart of a star
Given by the Lady

Its story is legend
Snakes have fallen to it before
The future is Bright

Weilded in the past
By kings and knights true and pure
Taken up again

Injustice will Fall
To the Bright blade of Freedom
A light of the Pure

Choice is yours and mine
Injustice and Bigotry
Or Freedom and Hope

Wielded by Arthur,
but where has he gone off to?
And whence the lady?

Foretold to return,
but the legend is absent,
his call unanswered.

Without his presence
Excaliber is not yours
to wield or invoke.

No light can compare,
whether pure or diluted,
to the Rising Sun.

If your sword is bright,
it is the suns reflection,
not your failing hope.

[kazlaton]

Strum Wealh, on 04 May 2014 - 03:54 PM, said:

The Fox perks his ears
Epic Davion haiku
Make the Dragon bow

Fox narrows his eyes,
Epic Davion haiku?
Perhaps. We shall see.

A dragon may bow,
out of respect, not defeat.
<bows to opponents>

[kazlaton]

CyclonerM, on 04 May 2014 - 01:26 PM, said:

... i think i have an understanding of your concepts of duty and honor, values shared by the Clans of Kerensky. I would like to try to write a haiku, but, well.. I have never studied syllabes in English Shame on me.

Any warrior who values duty and honor is welcome in House Kurita. If you want to try some haiku, we can always help. I found this link that does a pretty good job of explaining syllables.
http://www.englishfo.../wzgjx/post.htm

[Strum Wealh]

kazlaton, on 04 May 2014 - 11:14 PM, said:

Fox narrows his eyes,
Epic Davion haiku?
Perhaps. We shall see.

A dragon may bow,
out of respect, not defeat.
<bows to opponents>

Respect or defeat,
the Dragon bows nonetheless.
Thus, the Fox is pleased.

[Sparks Murphey]

kazlaton, on 26 April 2014 - 10:28 AM, said:

A haiku is 5/7/5. Your attempt is 5/5/9. Your failure has been noted.

English syllables demand
A change from Japanese on.
Five/seven/five optional.

The world turns
The cut marks contrast!
Haiku's soul.

Banker counts his beads
Ignoring the world's rhythm.
Never a poet.

Edited by Sparks Murphey, 05 May 2014 - 05:18 AM.

[kazlaton]

Sparks Murphey, on 05 May 2014 - 05:12 AM, said:

English syllables demand
A change from Japanese on.
Five/seven/five optional.

The world turns
The cut marks contrast!
Haiku's soul.

Banker counts his beads
Ignoring the world's rhythm.
Never a poet.

Yes! You haven't truly lived until you have been insulted in haiku. Awesome!

Supple as willow, yes.
but five/seven/five tradition,
the willows roots.


I have been humbled.
The soul, like a katana,
has cut me deeply.

Worlds rhythm holds sway
Sleeping seed counts days to spring
No banker needed.

[mithril coyote]

Blue Serpent Arises
The Ancient Red shackles broken
We Will Remain Free

Edited by mithril coyote, 07 May 2014 - 08:16 PM.