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[InnerSphereNews]

Wed. April 3rd, 3050: Formed from remnant League soldiers during 1st Succession Wars, Crucis Lancers under attack for “too traditionalists.”

[Dazzar]

Tradition is an explaination for acting without thinking.

Edited by Dazzar, 03 April 2013 - 07:46 AM.

[Calamus]

Who wrote this? Did they write it in English, Babelfish it in to Japanese, and then Babelfish it back in to English? It's a hot mess of individual words that make grammar police cry.

[Homeless Bill]

I do appreciate these little updates, but I'd really rather see a paragraph-long story with some context every week than an incoherent sentence every day.

[Enigmos]

Calamus, on 03 April 2013 - 08:05 AM, said:

Who wrote this? Did they write it in English, Babelfish it in to Japanese, and then Babelfish it back in to English? It's a hot mess of individual words that make grammar police cry.

Language is alive: it evolves. 2013 not spoken in 3050. Open mind.

Edited by OriginalTibs, 03 April 2013 - 09:35 AM.

[Skylarr]

InnerSphereNews, on 03 April 2013 - 07:40 AM, said:

Wed. April 3rd, 3050: Formed from remnant League soldiers during 1st Succession Wars, Crucis Lancers under attack for “too traditionalists.”

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After General Kerensky's exodus, some Star League soldiers remained in the Inner Sphere. Some of these drifted into the Federated Suns where, during the First Succession War, Prince John Davion organized all incomplete units into the Crucis Lancers. The Lancers held tight to many of the traditions of the Star League even as they have fully integrated themselves into the AFFS. Therefore, the modern Crucis Lancers recruit almost exclusively from worlds within the Crucis March.

[FrDrake]

Skylarr, on 03 April 2013 - 11:09 AM, said:

You should consult this guy when doing news feed updates !

[sub sight]

sooo not completely sure what this "news" update pertains to but what's wrong with being traditionalist? I for one like being old school. Of course this IS written weird so the update could mean something completely different.

[Skylarr]

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Wed. April 3rd, 3050: Formed from the remnants of Star League units during the 1st Succession Wars, the Crucis Lancers are under attack for being “too traditionalists.”

[tekka]

Wed. April 3rd, 3050: Formed from remnant League soldiers during 1st Succession Wars, Crucis Lancers under attack for “too traditionalists.”

Formed from remnant League soldiers during, “too traditionalists.”= clanns
rucis Lancers under attack ”
= merc company attacked (yes they are a real merc company from memory)

now how it should reead
Crucis Lancers under attack for “too traditionalists.”Formed from remnant League soldiers

[Calamus]

tekka, on 03 April 2013 - 06:38 PM, said:

now how it should reead
Crucis Lancers under attack for “too traditionalists.”Formed from remnant League soldiers

That still isn't proper english. Since you opened the door, if it read something like:

"The Crucis Lancers, formed from remnants of Star League Soldiers, are under attack for being "too traditional"."

or

"The Crucis Lancers, formed from remnants of Star League Soldiers, are under attack by "two traditionalists"."

or

"The Crucis Lancers, formed from remnants of Star League Soldiers, traditionally attack PGI for butchering lore updates in their Inner Sphere News segments."

[tekka]

"The Crucis Lancers, formed from remnants of Star League Soldiers, traditionally attack PGI for butchering lore updates in their Inner Sphere News segments."


lol

[Devil Fox]

They seem to enjoy leaving themselves open to this kinda of hammering everytime one of these ISN is put up... I mean is it that hard to read what you copy and paste from your word document. Come logical thinking is all it takes to correct some of these.

[Dexter Herbivore]

I get the feeling that the daily ISN broadcast is probably the lowest of priorities at the moment. Considering it serves no real purpose outside of lore building at the moment, I'll be more worried about it if it becomes actual news about CW and it's getting stuffed up then.

[Devil Fox]

Still a 5min google search of "Cruicis Lancers sarna" still doesn't hurt their time frame and the little bit of extra info and QA check doesn't hurt the improved perception of the company... simple yet effective stuff to make us happier to see these... simple yes?!

[Capp]

Wed. April 3rd, 2013: Formed from remnant phrases during last night's bender, Inner Sphere News Post under attack for “not Grammar.”

[Capp]

Calamus, on 03 April 2013 - 06:59 PM, said:

That still isn't proper english. Since you opened the door, if it read something like:

"The Crucis Lancers, formed from remnants of Star League Soldiers, are under attack for being "too traditional"."

or

"The Crucis Lancers, formed from remnants of Star League Soldiers, are under attack by "two traditionalists"."

or

"The Crucis Lancers, formed from remnants of Star League Soldiers, traditionally attack PGI for butchering lore updates in their Inner Sphere News segments."

Just to be technical, they were formed with remnants of the Star League Defense Force, not from pieces of individual soldiers.

In this way the original post did succeed in that the solders themselves were identified as remnants. Where it truly failed was at the end. Should have been either "for BEING "too traditionalist." (I think that still works) or "for BEING "too traditional." or for HAVING "too MANY traditionalists." Though the latter is probably not the intent of the sentence.

The English language is weird.

[Morang]

"Too traditionalists?" We are so modern today, that we still haven't rediscovered all "too traditional" LosTech of the Star League.

And are Crucis Lancer "under attack" for their traditionalism on the battlefield... or is it just on holovid channels by some yapping media lap-dog?

[Chief 117]

Calamus, on 03 April 2013 - 06:59 PM, said:

"The Crucis Lancers, formed from remnants of Star League Soldiers, traditionally attack PGI for butchering lore updates in their Inner Sphere News segments."

rofl

[Zatnik]

sub sight, on 03 April 2013 - 01:57 PM, said:

sooo not completely sure what this "news" update pertains to but what's wrong with being traditionalist? I for one like being old school. Of course this IS written weird so the update could mean something completely different.

Ah, I think you misunderstand the post.

What our reporter friend meant to say was that they (the Crucis Lancers) are being criticized for being two traditionalists. Unfortunately the wrong 'to' was used, so I can see why you might be confused..

NB, two traditionalists are not enough to make a single lance, never mind the multiple lances that the outfit's name suggests. That's false advertising, and I'd criticise them too!