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[Davoke]

So is that your number dal?

[dal10]

idk, depends if thom endorses it or not.

thom is the the guy in charge of this thread, therefore he is the master number picker.

Edited by dal10, 31 October 2013 - 07:18 PM.

[Thom Frankfurt]

dal10, on 31 October 2013 - 02:47 PM, said:

hey thom, pick a number between one and one hundred. This is important.

Roll(1d100)+0:
92,+0
Total:92

Now what the Heck am I rolling for?

In regards to the mech, I'd prefer a Shadow Hawk to the gladiator.

[dal10]

if you accepted davoke into the RP i offered to let him RP the other half of my tourney bracket. it was to end with a PC v PC fight. since this is always a dicey proposition i had to get an impartial number picker. if you picked an odd number i won, if you picked an even number he won. So I lose the finals match.

on a side note davoke, my original math was right, there would be 5 rounds in a 32 person tourney bracket, so i fail at math still.

[Davoke]

I guess the almighty GM wants me to use a Shadow Hawk. So Shadow Hawk it is.

[dal10]

on a side note(i have more side notes than i know what to do with.), what did you guys think of my last post?

[RogueSpear]

Keep side notes to the OOC thread, not the RP
I'll actually read it when I get to the airport and try to pass comment then, if I can get a connection

[dal10]

RogueSpear, on 01 November 2013 - 05:49 PM, said:

Keep side notes to the OOC thread, not the RP
I'll actually read it when I get to the airport and try to pass comment then, if I can get a connection

least i am keeping them out of the main body of my posts now, footnotes are much cleaner.

[Thom Frankfurt]

Uh... *scratches head* what just happen?

Edit: Loved the post, Dal.

Edited by Thom Frankfurt, 02 November 2013 - 01:18 AM.

[Davoke]

Ok Thom, I've made the edits everyone suggested. Should I repost the edited one or leave it where it is?

[Thom Frankfurt]

Please repost it. I'm kind of hungover at the moment, and being lazy.

[Davoke]

A repost for Thom since he was feeling lazy.


Name: Russo Charikov
Call sign: Foolverine
Date of Birth/Age: 35, 4/1/2996
Current Mech: Customized Shadow Hawk, a mech produced during the 1st Succession War, so old and held together by duct tape and prayers.

• Changes: Armor has been substantially increased with the maximizing of torso armor, as well as increases on the relatively weak legs. The AC/5 and Right Arm laser were retained, though an additional laser was mounted in the same arm, the LRM5 and SRM2 were removed and replaced with an SRM4, and a CT MLas was mounted to cover the rear arc. The Jump Jets were removed and an additional heatsink was added to support these changes. The AC/5 carries two tons of ammo instead of one.

House Affiliation: Having received his mech from a DCMS Sho-Sa, his is favorably disposed towards House Kurita, but isn't loyal to any house. Favorably disposed "closet patriot" of the Marian Hegemony.




Military History: Russo spent from age 18-28 hiring out to small corporations and periphery powers as a headhunter, using an ancient Assassin mech to hunt down pirates. His mech was scrapped in 3028 when fighting some pirates, but he managed to save a DCMS Sho-Sa, who gifted him a family heirloom:An ancient, though respectably well cared for, Shadow Hawk. The mech saw him through another several missions, after which he "liberated" a sizable sum of C-Bills and a Wasp from some pirates. He sold the Wasp and paid his way to Solaris, a bit better off than most others, his main disadvantage here...he doesn't yet have a Tech or AsTechs to help maintain his mech, and is forced to spend days of personal time repairing his damaged machine after battles. His type of fighting is highly opportunistic, lending him a great advantage in one-on-one and even two-on-one, though he is entirely unaccustomed to working with other pilots; as a result he is a terrible lancemate, often more worried abut getting a kill or crippling the enemy than with an ally's condition.

Physical Description: Russo is 6'5", a tight fit in most cockpits, though the Shadow Hawk's lengthy cockpit allows him to recline surprisingly comfortably. He is more lanky than wide, though his broad shoulders and 230 pounds give him an imposing(and somewhat dashing) figure. He has light blond hair and dark green eyes that almost always seem to be twinkling with some devious plan. He keeps his hair cut short, though he does maintain an "operator" style beard.

Notable Items/Equipment: His extra-large cooling vest is a patchwork of two smaller cooling vests woven and connected together to provide him with something capable of handling his height and bulk, and his slight paranoia caused him to add an additional layer of ballistic cloth. His "casual" clothing is mostly fatigue pants combined with T-Shirt and bomber style jackets. His "formal" outfit is a long midtone blue cape with gold trim, combined with an elegant dress jacket in a slightly darker blue, with gold and white trim, the pants are a lighter blue with white stripes running down the outside of each pants leg. He carries a fancifully handcrafted heavy auto-pistol gifted to him by a grateful JarnFolk jumpship Captain for (accidentally) saving the man's son. After finding a nice stash of pirate loot and selling a Wasp, he is fortunate enough to have 2 Million C-Bills, though his paranoia leads him to hide most of it, rather than risk attracting attention to himself.

Open Background: Russo hails from the Periphery world of Strafford in the Marian Hegemony. His family ran a chain of small businesses that supplied mostly food and clothes. His work in the Periphery and Deep Periphery hunting pirates was notable only for his almost-trademark habit of ripping an arm or leg off an enemy mech after a kill to salvage the myomer and actuator packages. His personal wealth is subject to some guesswork. His kill-count sits at 24 mechs, most of them lights or mediums(and mostly pitiful pirate ones at that), though one exceptional(and almost impossibly lucky case) was a snapshot where he blasted an Atlas right as he wheeled around a corner, slamming all his fire into the cockpit. Needless to say, much alcohol was consumed afterwards. He is highly independent, and very unsociable, retaining an aloof and menacing air which makes him an absolute nuisance and terrible lance member.

Deep Background: Russo is surprisingly a very intense "closet" patriot for the Marian Hegemony, his original Assassin was a gift to Russo's father from the original ruler, Imperator O'Reilly. As a result, he is highly loyal to the Hegemony, and was promised a brand new Kintaro-18 if he would win 5 battles to prove his "worth" to the Hegemony; as a result he is eager to begin work immediately. Other than this, his anti-sociability and hostile attitude towards others came from being unable to save his brother in a fight against a Marauder. Instead of being the goody-goody "it'll never happen again!" hero, he decided that he wouldn't deal with anyone unless he absolutely has to.

[Davoke]

Still waitin on you Thom.

[Thom Frankfurt]

Davoke, on 03 November 2013 - 03:13 PM, said:

Still waitin on you Thom.

Sorry, spent the last two days gaming. It felt good to let my inner nerd out for a bit...

As to the character, I like it, but there's some concerns/issues that are bugging me.

1. While the Shadow Hawk is a decent mech, I was wondering why you didn't pick a Wolverine with your call sign of Foolverine. Maybe it could have been something that stuck around by having your first mech be a Wolvie? It's nothing big, I'm just finding it an odd name for an assassin/S Hawk pilot to have.

2. In 3028 the Combine is very hostile to mercenaries. Takashi Kurita even has a 'Death to All Mercenaries' edict in effect, so you may want to change where you got the 'Hawk from. Also the DC is pretty far away from the Hegemony, another thing to consider.

3. 2 mil C-bills is quite a sum. You could easily sell your 'Hawk and with the money from that and your cache of cash, buy a heavy mech. So I'm not going to be okay with that.

4. An Atlas, really? I don't understand everyone's infatuation with this mech and personally I think this mech rears it's ugly head far too often. Now just to be absolutely clear, popping a snapshot at an assault and dropping it with some freakishly good headshots is something I'm comfortable with, I just don't see why it couldn't be a Zues, Victor, Stalker, Awesome, or something else...

That being said, not bad. How's your BT lore? and I hope I haven't already asked you that.

[RogueSpear]

Finally got the chance to read that post Dal. Overall, I like it. Some spelling and grammar errors, but nothing too major.
I really liked the description of the reporter. It was very well done - described her just well enough for anyone who read to come up with a mental image of her. The simile about the librarian she should have been lent it a personal touch, seemed like we were reading Takeo's thoughts.
The section where things turned rough I wasn't as much of a fan of. We went very suddenly from two pilots just trying to hold their own in an interview to drawing firearms on each other inside half an A4 page. You set up the scene as a very friendly situation, both pilots seemed to be getting on just fine, interviews going well, everything very civilized, and then very abruptly dropped the bomb that Zatander thinks Takeo is a cowardly scumbag and it's beneath her to have to fight him. You prefaced it with the comment that her comment about him being a coward finally wore through his patience, but gave no indication that it was being eroded. Escalating straight up to physical violence and death threats from that start left me feeling very confused, which is a shame because it had a great beginning. Plus, it's not like these guys are soldiers (Or is Takeo? I forget, haven't gotten to know the character yet), they're essentially athletes and entertainers. It's sort of like watching Stallone and Mr. T pulling pistols before their big fight in Rocky III(?). You don't expect it, so you need to explain why they're going straight for their guns as soon as their pride is wounded.

Something I think might suit the style of your posts is to have a narrator. Lines like "Takeo's response? Make me." and the majority of your footnotes work very well when you have a character telling a story, not quite so well when we're reading the adventure as it happens.

For example, instead of having a footnote saying 'Seriously, you guys even surprised that some hotshot female mech pilot on Solaris is a Natasha Kerensky wannabe?' by framing the post in the manner of 'The Big Lebowski,' where the cowboy from the bar is telling the story, you'd just be able to slap that in the middle of your post. You can then call back to it later in the post.
"And now Takeo, he's with me, he calls her straight out. He says, 'Yes, you little Natasha Kerensky wannabe, I am the coward.' He's pissed now, he ain't holding back...'
How much you want to have your narrator making commentary is of course, up to yourself. I just had that cowboy talking to me It's just an idea, but it might be an interesting concept for you to play with.

Edited by RogueSpear, 04 November 2013 - 01:59 AM.

[Davoke]

Well, most of what's happened to him is an accident. He never worked with the DCMS, just independently hunted pirates or got hired by corporations/periphery states to do so. Basically he worked his way up around the left side of the Periphery and happened to accidentally save the Sho-Sa(and his lance), who in turn gave him the Shadow Hawk since he had just received a Dragon and no longer needed the older mech. As for the money, i already said he's paranoid about spending it; he won't be using it except when times get tough and he absolutely has to(Plus he's getting shipped a mint condition Kintaro after 5 victories in the name of the Hegemony, so he'd rather not spend money he doesn't have to since he's a scavenger/miser from his experience in the Periphery). As for the last one, it was more of "Uhh...big, intimidating, oh Atlas!"

[Thom Frankfurt]

Yeah, no.

[dal10]

RogueSpear, on 04 November 2013 - 01:55 AM, said:

Finally got the chance to read that post Dal. Overall, I like it. Some spelling and grammar errors, but nothing too major.
I really liked the description of the reporter. It was very well done - described her just well enough for anyone who read to come up with a mental image of her. The simile about the librarian she should have been lent it a personal touch, seemed like we were reading Takeo's thoughts.
The section where things turned rough I wasn't as much of a fan of. We went very suddenly from two pilots just trying to hold their own in an interview to drawing firearms on each other inside half an A4 page. You set up the scene as a very friendly situation, both pilots seemed to be getting on just fine, interviews going well, everything very civilized, and then very abruptly dropped the bomb that Zatander thinks Takeo is a cowardly scumbag and it's beneath her to have to fight him. You prefaced it with the comment that her comment about him being a coward finally wore through his patience, but gave no indication that it was being eroded. Escalating straight up to physical violence and death threats from that start left me feeling very confused, which is a shame because it had a great beginning. Plus, it's not like these guys are soldiers (Or is Takeo? I forget, haven't gotten to know the character yet), they're essentially athletes and entertainers. It's sort of like watching Stallone and Mr. T pulling pistols before their big fight in Rocky III(?). You don't expect it, so you need to explain why they're going straight for their guns as soon as their pride is wounded.

Something I think might suit the style of your posts is to have a narrator. Lines like "Takeo's response? Make me." and the majority of your footnotes work very well when you have a character telling a story, not quite so well when we're reading the adventure as it happens.

For example, instead of having a footnote saying 'Seriously, you guys even surprised that some hotshot female mech pilot on Solaris is a Natasha Kerensky wannabe?' by framing the post in the manner of 'The Big Lebowski,' where the cowboy from the bar is telling the story, you'd just be able to slap that in the middle of your post. You can then call back to it later in the post.
"And now Takeo, he's with me, he calls her straight out. He says, 'Yes, you little Natasha Kerensky wannabe, I am the coward.' He's pissed now, he ain't holding back...'
How much you want to have your narrator making commentary is of course, up to yourself. I just had that cowboy talking to me It's just an idea, but it might be an interesting concept for you to play with.

fair enough. the burning through the nerve part was basically he was trying to be all nice and personable with the reporters and she was just being rude to them like she clearly didn't want to be there., it could probably be written better, and i will likely do a rework when i get the time. i have other papers to write tonight... i can understand the narrator part, i just have issues keeping everything in the correct person, i switch between both types of third almost randomly at times.

[RogueSpear]

I got that impression, with the switching styles. It can make your posts hard to read at times because of the shifting perspective - but each perspective is written pretty well.
After a couple read throughs I was able to figure out where the lack of patience was coming from, but it wasn't entirely evident from the first couple goes. Hopefully that's not just my impression

[dal10]

if you have that much cash, you should just make it so you don't have access to most of it. Takeo arguably has more money than that in his pension and long term investments, but he doesn't have access to more than a little bit of it at any one time.