Posted 10 September 2013 - 01:45 PM
Wolf, if you don't mind, I think I see what the problem is with your character.
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"Yeah, but I mean at his core, he's broken. He has no real reason to be here."
He had taken them in fulfulling the last wishes of the lone mech pilot that gave his life. . .
. . . he was transferred over to the 7th Kommando, and put on a special assignment. . .
The Dragoons had taken major losses after the conflicts between them and the DC. Dylan himself had heard of the encounters, however, were some of the first reinforcements for the Dragoons from outside of the periphery. As a test, and after several encounters on the periphery to test the warrior's mettle, Dylan was sent to Solaris, to discern whether members of the Sphere could be considered capable for recruitment into the Dragoons.
Dylan was to do this by studying his fellow stable members. . .
The reason the 7th Kommando wanted this information. . .
As such, they knew they couldn't wait for reinforcements from the Clans for much longer, and from the hearsay passing along through the lines from home communique, it seemed like the Dragoons might actually be faced with recruiting from the Inner Sphere alone. As such, Dylan was given a crash course in field work by the 7th to insure that he didn't get himself killed, and to properly note his stablemates' habits.
When they arrived to Solaris, they began their search for a stable that matched what they wanted. . .
And so, they found Rainbow stables and placed Dylan there. . .
. . .is still receiving updates on Draco's training, which from what he's heard, is progressing well. He is also on the lookout for kids that show traits that he's looking for to start a unit up with the Dragoons, the 1st Hell Jumpers battalion. . .
With several candidates already sent to command for integration into sibkos. . .
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That character sheet reads more like a mission brief than a biography and background Wolf. It's almost like you're trying to play the Dragoons instead of Dylan. Tell us what Dylan wants. Tell us what Dylan thinks. Why did Dylan come to Solaris. What does Dylan think about the Games?
Background is just a place to start, but you're letting Dylan get crushed by his. I'd like to see you back away from the Dragoons and bring the character to the front in L&D Chapter 2.