Vodkavaiator, on 03 July 2012 - 12:06 PM, said:
If I am to offer my spontatious opinion then both a failed cloning and ever lasting youth seem rather OP/Silly/Mary Sue/etc.
I sort of feel a bit like Thom as well, some of the most interesting characters I have seen here are the "normal guys" Azman, Rick, Demarkus, etc. As much fun as it can be to have various covert clan operators and so forth it always tends to feel a bit like "powergaming" and for me it is always less interesting.
Touche on that. I don't aim for Mary Sue, and not everlasting youth, per say. Only looks. Her body ages (she'll die due to old age), just her looks don't change. Didn't mean to put forth the Everlasting Youth thing.
And, well, I don't see many failed clones really.
And I did say it wouldn't be that much to change it, tbh. I wrote after a few hours on sarna at 11:01 PM, which, at the current time, felt like 1:01 AM :s
Just need to pull up the word doc and start the changes.
EDIT:
Name: Isabella “Izzy” Hunter (Real Last name: Ward – The Clan Wolf Bloodname*)
Callsign: Princess
Date of Birth/Age: 20; December 13
th, 3011
Current Mech: Sentienl named Midnight Roar
House Affiliation: Un-Affiliated, trying to prove herself before signing up for the Wolf’s Dragoons
Military History: One Year of live-fire combat; While not the best pilot, she still is capable, especially in terrain she can use to her advantage.
Physical Description:
5’11, shoulder blade length blonde hair, green eyes. Lithe body, very athletic. She has a long, jagged scar on her back, reaching from the top of her right shoulder blade and ending at the left side of her waist. Usually wears jeans, a button-up shirt, and a black leather jacket.
Personality:
Distant and quiet, almost cold. Izzy was once a bright, happy girl, only slightly distant, but her father’s death and the revelation from her mother caused her to grow even farther from people. She doesn’t open herself to just anyone, and it takes a lot to get her to even speak at length. Izzy has a violent side to her; she becomes dangerous, severely hurting anyone in the immediate area before she calms down.
She becomes particularly violent when someone attempts to take her locket.
Notable Equipment:
Five stiletto knives – two up either sleeve, two on her shoulders, and one last one on her thigh
Locket – Picture of Sora Hikari inside
Open Background:
Born on Cylene, in the capital of Haclyon to a lumberjack father and an ex-Mechwarrior Mercenary mother turned businesswoman. Izzy went to a private school her entire life, graduating and attending the University of Halcyon. Izzy was an intelligent student, but always a bit distant, especially from her classmates She graduated with top honors in 3027, but dropped out of school life at 19 due to news of her father’s death in an accident involving an Industrial Mech and a rockslide. Izzy disappeared from Cylene after what was reported as a violent argument with her mother. Izzy then stole most of her family’s savings and fled.
Has come to Solaris to try and bring in more cash, as the money she stole from her mother lasted only six months, causing her to sell her guns (for god pay) to make it buy. This also included a stint as a dancer on Galatea.
Deep Background:
Izzy is the daughter of a pair of Wolf’s Dragoons Zeta Battalion MechWarriors. The scar came from her second week on Outreach, where she got in a fight with some Mechwarriors at the space port. One of the Warriors had a knife, which grievously wounded her. Izzy would have died, had not a couple Wolf’s Dragoons broken up the fight
The fight with her mother was about who her real parents were; Izzy’s violent tendencies caused her to serverly beat her mother and instill a fear of losing control like that again. She avoids emotional attachments now.
Her Sentinel, the Midnight Roar, is decorated on the side with the image of a keyhole, a remembrance to a former lover, Sora Hikari, whose whereabouts are unknown.
Is trying to locater her father’s missing Archer BattleMech.
*Her parents were a pair of MechWarriors, Jeremiah and Natarle Ward, who put her up for adoption because they felt they couldn’t devote enough time to her.
She swings for both sides as well.
Edited by Jeremy Hunter, 03 July 2012 - 12:24 PM.